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Charlotte Eve Lonely Fan

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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:18 pm Post subject: |
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Not much time for you to train
beaten to it, sorry.. _________________ President of the P*Monkey Fan Club
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grantsnx Suspiciously Absent
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:18 pm Post subject: |
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i'd like to thank cassie for giving us a good easy one. It really helps morale  |
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EmilyElle Casual Observer
Joined: 01 Oct 2006 Posts: 87 Location: Ontario, Canada
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:19 pm Post subject: |
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meghan2 wrote: | not much time for you to train |
Whoa, you got there WAY before I did... haha. Awesome. |
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ubergeek Casual Observer
Joined: 28 Sep 2006 Posts: 27
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:19 pm Post subject: |
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Seems like not all the feet here are iambs. Beginning of line two is a trochee.
EDIT: Also, "not much time for you to train" has 7 beats...it can't be iambic quadrameter with seven beats. Not to mention the beginning of this line isn't iambic at all. Just don't want to go down the wrong track here...
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grantsnx Suspiciously Absent
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:19 pm Post subject: |
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HALLETEK with it SIGNA SEPHREAL:
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ogami1972 Casual Observer
Joined: 16 Sep 2006 Posts: 82
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:20 pm Post subject: |
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mLe wrote: | toadlguy wrote: | grantsnx wrote: | ELEVEN DAYS UNTIL MY FATE
MEET ME JUST INSIDE THE GATES
TON MICHEMUT OURFOY TAINOTR,
SLILT KOUYCIB ENDAR CAPLIMON.
HALLETEK WHITIT SIGNA SEPHREAL:
ELEVEN DAYS, ELEVEN DAYS
What we have so far?? |
2nd line is wrong - needs 4 words and gates doesn't rhyme with fate |
Should be:
Eleven days until my fate
meets me just inside the gate
tonmichemut ourfoy tainotr
Still you bicker and complain
halletek whitit signa sephreal
eleven days, eleven days |
agreed! |
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grantsnx Suspiciously Absent
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:20 pm Post subject: |
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Take hell with it SIGNA SEPHREAL:?? |
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bubbajay424 Lonely Fan
Joined: 20 Sep 2006 Posts: 184
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:21 pm Post subject: |
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The fifth line probably ends in praise...unless you got something else that rhymes with days.
Could be "he slang praise"... _________________ cassie is my homegirl
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njg2q Suspiciously Absent
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:22 pm Post subject: |
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"the lake with it", or "with it the lake" *edit: nevermind, need an extra L
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EmilyElle Casual Observer
Joined: 01 Oct 2006 Posts: 87 Location: Ontario, Canada
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:22 pm Post subject: |
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ubergeek wrote: | Seems like not all the feet here are iambs. Beginning of line two is a trochee.
EDIT: Also, "not much time for you to train" has 7 beats...it can't be iambic quadrameter with seven beats. Not to mention the beginning of this line isn't iambic at all. Just don't want to go down the wrong track here... |
Yeah... you're right... a trochee is an inverted iamb, though... and we all know Cassie's a big fan of inverting things |
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prep him Casual Observer
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:23 pm Post subject: |
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PHRASE would rhyme with days... |
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ubergeek Casual Observer
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:24 pm Post subject: |
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EmilyElle wrote: | ubergeek wrote: | Seems like not all the feet here are iambs. Beginning of line two is a trochee.
EDIT: Also, "not much time for you to train" has 7 beats...it can't be iambic quadrameter with seven beats. Not to mention the beginning of this line isn't iambic at all. Just don't want to go down the wrong track here... |
Yeah... you're right... a trochee is an inverted iamb, though... and we all know Cassie's a big fan of inverting things |
Even if you ignore the several exceptions to iambic meter in the poem thus far, "not much time for you to train" doesn't fit either iambic or trochee meter. |
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bubbajay424 Lonely Fan
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:25 pm Post subject: |
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then "is angel phrase:"? _________________ cassie is my homegirl |
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alexisme Lonely Fan
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:25 pm Post subject: |
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ELEVEN DAYS UNTIL MY FATE
MEET ME JUST INSIDE THE GATES
TON MICHEMUT OURFOY TAINOTR,
STILL YOU BICKER AND COMPLAIN.
HALLETEK WHITIT SINGING PRAISE:
ELEVEN DAYS, ELEVEN DAYS _________________ -.-. .- ... ... .. . .. ... .-- .- - -.-. .... .. -. --. |
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EmilyElle Casual Observer
Joined: 01 Oct 2006 Posts: 87 Location: Ontario, Canada
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:26 pm Post subject: |
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alexisme wrote: | ELEVEN DAYS UNTIL MY FATE
MEET ME JUST INSIDE THE GATES
TON MICHEMUT OURFOY TAINOTR,
STILL YOU BICKER AND COMPLAIN.
HALLETEK WHITIT SINGING PRAISE:
ELEVEN DAYS, ELEVEN DAYS |
There's an L in the "singing praise" though... |
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