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skingraph666
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| good work guys lets keep it going i think we are real close... |
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How am I doing? PM me if I missed anything please (I'd rather this thread was just good firm suggestions and summaries rather than messages to me  ):
ED SHIN SIT | BE SINGING HIS NIT
this is end | this is beginning
A ED GEE HI STINT | DEED IF NULL YOW
inside the gate | you will defend
SEETHE MOP TYPO | ED FIR NYLON DEED.
the ???????????? | ??????????????????
MY A TETCHIER PUSH | CONCEDE TEN TOM,
the ???? / my use that cipher | connected to me,
the picture has | not yet commenced
A CEDE RIPOSTS SO | CEDE IF NIL NOS.
it ?????????? | ????????????????
A ED ERG HEN THREW | ED HEEL KILN WRIT
the danger where | we'll tie her kind
the garden where | the killer wined
HITCHED POLLS SLUT | DOFF ION YO RUT.
still holds the cup | for you to find.
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leocass86
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4PROCESS SO TIED/IS A LION FENCED
For that to work it would have to ba AS a lion fenced. Gramatically, it doesn't work. But something about it is very very close.
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Kelrast
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Line 5 could be:
THE GARDEN WHERE THE KILLER WINED |
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meghan2
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the cup still holds for you to find
the danger where well tie her kind
maybe a dead drop is in the future...a cup and inside that cup maybe directions to where things will happen?? |
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bowenkge
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A CEDE RIPOSTS SO | CEDE IF NIL NOS
It proceeds as so, is lion fenced?
The picture has not yet commenced.
Maybe we just haven't seen the lion picture yet. Or maybe there's no lion and my brain has melted out of my ears. |
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EmilyElle
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| leocass86 wrote: | 4PROCESS SO TIED/IS A LION FENCED
For that to work it would have to ba AS a lion fenced. Gramatically, it doesn't work. But something about it is very very close. |
How does that not work grammatically? "a lion fenced" is a thing... the only thing not grammatically okay is the lack of a preposition before "process"... it should be "a process", probably. |
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brandoblues
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yeah i was thinking garden, cause it more locationy
(wined, wind, rewind, kind, many ryhmes with find, still working on that line myself)
and line 4 isnt starting with a p
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atomikbr
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| Kelrast wrote: | Line 5 could be:
THE GARDEN WHERE THE KILLER WINED |
Sounds great. |
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leocass86
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| EmilyElle wrote: | | leocass86 wrote: | 4PROCESS SO TIED/IS A LION FENCED
For that to work it would have to ba AS a lion fenced. Gramatically, it doesn't work. But something about it is very very close. |
How does that not work grammatically? "a lion fenced" is a thing... the only thing not grammatically okay is the lack of a preposition before "process"... it should be "a process", probably. |
It's a metaphor. A metaphor is a comparison using Like or As... not is. Is gramatically does not work in a metaphor.
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EmilyElle
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| leocass86 wrote: | | EmilyElle wrote: | | leocass86 wrote: | 4PROCESS SO TIED/IS A LION FENCED
For that to work it would have to ba AS a lion fenced. Gramatically, it doesn't work. But something about it is very very close. |
How does that not work grammatically? "a lion fenced" is a thing... the only thing not grammatically okay is the lack of a preposition before "process"... it should be "a process", probably. |
It's a metaphor. A metaphor is a comparison using Like or As... not is. Is gramatically does not work in a metaphor. |
No, that's a similie. A metaphor can be a direct comparison... "the grandmother's hair was tumbling snow on a mountain of the wrinkles of years", or somesuch. |
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plugs
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| something seems 'off' with the 'we'll tie her kind' part too. but i ave no other suggestions. |
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leocass86
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| EmilyElle wrote: | | leocass86 wrote: | | EmilyElle wrote: | | leocass86 wrote: | 4PROCESS SO TIED/IS A LION FENCED
For that to work it would have to ba AS a lion fenced. Gramatically, it doesn't work. But something about it is very very close. |
How does that not work grammatically? "a lion fenced" is a thing... the only thing not grammatically okay is the lack of a preposition before "process"... it should be "a process", probably. |
It's a metaphor. A metaphor is a comparison using Like or As... not is. Is gramatically does not work in a metaphor. |
No, that's a similie. A metaphor can be a direct comparison... "the grandmother's hair was tumbling snow on a mountain of the wrinkles of years", or somesuch. |
So I got my words crossed. In any case, I don't see it working out the way it's written. As you said, process so tied doesn't work either. The line isn't complete.
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brandoblues
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yeah we'll as in We will
so far she hasnt said anything in the 'more than one person' has she?
btw everyone since this is the where try to think like its a poem about a place when coming up with sentences
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EmilyElle
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| leocass86 wrote: | | EmilyElle wrote: | | leocass86 wrote: | | EmilyElle wrote: | | leocass86 wrote: | 4PROCESS SO TIED/IS A LION FENCED
For that to work it would have to ba AS a lion fenced. Gramatically, it doesn't work. But something about it is very very close. |
How does that not work grammatically? "a lion fenced" is a thing... the only thing not grammatically okay is the lack of a preposition before "process"... it should be "a process", probably. |
It's a metaphor. A metaphor is a comparison using Like or As... not is. Is gramatically does not work in a metaphor. |
No, that's a similie. A metaphor can be a direct comparison... "the grandmother's hair was tumbling snow on a mountain of the wrinkles of years", or somesuch. |
So I got my words crossed. In any case, I don't see it working out the way it's written. As you said, process so tied doesn't work either. The line isn't complete. |
That I agree with, but I really like something about a "lion fenced". |
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