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laurenesque · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 7:57 pm Post subject:

So this is something my fiance just threw out-- I was reading him the other poems, and he asked if, for line 6 of this one, we'd considered putting "rape" at the end. It's morbid, and would be more of an approximate rhyme, but... I dunno. I figured I'd just toss it up here since we're still looking for the answer.
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romanceismusic · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 7:58 pm Post subject:

Olympus321 · Casual Observer Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 62

Olympus321 · Casual Observer Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 62

NOS collected these in the forum of past ideas.

I PASS HIS VOICE DOWN I CREATE
HIS VOICE I PASS DOWN, I CREATE
VICES POISON A WISH, I'D CREATE
I WORSHIP CASSIE ON VICE DATE
HIS EPIC WOVES CRISIS ON A DATE
IN CAVES ECHOES DRIP, I WAIT
PEACH COVERS INSIDES, I WAIT
VOICES DIES RIP SO HE CAN WAIT
PERISHED VOICE SCIONS AWAIT
IN PRIDES ECHO CAVES, I WAIT
ASIDE COVES ON CIPHERS I WAIT

What are the current best suggestions?

Nicole · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 8:06 pm Post subject:

None of those sound right.

Pipsqueak33 · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 8:07 pm Post subject:

Eleven days till my fate
Is spied, so her voice can wait ?

or

Is spied, so can her voice wait ?

Olympus321 · Casual Observer Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 62

Something tells me we can't solve this one without some extra help. There are just too many variables

TheChessboardWoman · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 8:10 pm Post subject:

Jengels2002 · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 8:13 pm Post subject:

KELRAST...HELP US
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Jengels2002 · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 8:13 pm Post subject:

...avoid rape

or ...witness rape
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TheChessboardWoman · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 8:17 pm Post subject:

Vindicate!

Leaves EPOOSSERWHAISC

Question

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Nicole · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 8:18 pm Post subject:

Of course the line with infinite variables is the only one that isn't repeated in another poem. Evil or Very Mad

TheChessboardWoman · Posted: Tue Oct 03, 2006 8:19 pm Post subject:

hophead · Casual Observer Joined: 19 Sep 2006 Posts: 35

Remove:
CASSIES VOICE
WAIT

Left with:
IHDONPER

starman · Suspiciously Absent Joined: 01 Oct 2006 Posts: 16

I am no poet, but as I understand it, the last line needs to:

1. Have 4 beats in it
2. End is something that rhymes with FATE
3. Have something to do with the "How", since the rest of the stanza is a repeat of earlier lines, none of which talk about How.

Probably stating the obvious here, but I thought it was worth mentioning.