Lonelygirl15

[P3d0b34r]

Hi there. I know this isn't a video, but I'ev been writing fanfiction about Bree for a while now. All of my friends say it's really good, maybe you guys could tell me what you think. I'll post the first chapter now. I've added in a few characters of my own.this takes place just before the latest video.


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I lov Bree! Will u marri me, lulz!?/1!!?

[Killthesmiley]

now this is not to offend, this is an honest opinion from a writer, but I tried to read it. i tried really hard. i tried really really hard. And i couldn't make a lick of sense out of it. Is it translated to english from a different language using an online translator? Because it reminded me of that. i'm not trying to offend! I really am not. I just want to put it out there that it is unorganized, and it seemed like it was translated using a online translator that only translates words, not meaning.
By the looks of it, and some of the words that are in there, if I am correct it looks to be translated from French to English. If this is the case I suggest finding a person who can translate the meaning behind it, not just the words. There is a lot more then translating stories then jsut translating words. There is a need to translate emotion and clearity and atmosphere. When translating a story, you can not take the short route and just plug it into a web site and expect it to translate it to make sense, because it won't.

If I'm wrong...completely disregard that.
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[janesalteredstates]

Dadaist Bree fan-fic!
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[jobee13]

[voyboy]

i am clueless. and very curious to know how you wrote this, and why...
(and thats no insult !!! you have my attention)
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[janesalteredstates]

This reminds me of that inexplicable spam I get in my e-mail bulk folder.
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[Sheikh Gomelez]

[heyiknowsyou]

read this dramatically out loud. it is a damned good time.

i think it was lost in translation, though. it says he's from Brazil, so it was probably originally done in Portugese. It seems as if Jonas is a bad guy? He kills Daniel? And theres a mention of Crowley, so maybe he's controlling someone. *shrug* hopefully he can get this translated so we can understand it.
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[heyiknowsyou]

read this dramatically out loud. it is a damned good time.

i think it was lost in translation, though. it says he's from Brazil, so it was probably originally done in Portugese. It seems as if Jonas is a bad guy? He kills Daniel? And theres a mention of Crowley, so maybe he's controlling someone. *shrug* hopefully he can get this translated so we can understand it.
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[janesalteredstates]

[Sheikh Gomelez]